Pitching to small and local gym owners. I think I need a better hook, something to get their attention immediately, what suggestions do you have for me?
You did a very good job of showing emotion in your elevator pitch, it showed that you were excited about this service. I also like how you mention that your company would be local which so that gyms will get to personally meet with you to plan. Then you make a good point that your service can handle all the advertising/ promoting so that the gym can work on more things that add value to the actual gym. Great post!
You elevator pitch was well spoken, I thought it was great how you would ask a question, pause, then further develop the point you are trying to get across. Regarding your question about a hook, maybe consider starting with a statistic about how many small gyms crumble due to failure to keep up with large franchises. After giving that stat, explain how you are there to help ensure that won't be them. Just an idea, great pitch so far though!
Your elevator pitch was delivered very confidently and in an organized manner. What seemed to stand out to me was the way you described exactly how you could advertise and promote the gyms you would be helping. The idea of promoting through social media is not only a great idea, but also something I believe many gym owners aren't quite comfortable with. Being at the age you are many gym owners would likely trust you to promote their gyms in the most appealing and accessible manner possible.
Great flowing elevator pitch. It appears you have a background in sales and you sold your service well. The ability to sale your company well, show the potential customer that you can sale their gym just as well. The only suggestion or feedback I would be able to give would be how many times you say “right”. It was a little distracting, but that was all I could find wrong. The message, tone, pace and inflection were on point.
Lukas,
ReplyDeleteYou did a very good job of showing emotion in your elevator pitch, it showed that you were excited about this service. I also like how you mention that your company would be local which so that gyms will get to personally meet with you to plan. Then you make a good point that your service can handle all the advertising/ promoting so that the gym can work on more things that add value to the actual gym. Great post!
Lukas,
ReplyDeleteYou elevator pitch was well spoken, I thought it was great how you would ask a question, pause, then further develop the point you are trying to get across. Regarding your question about a hook, maybe consider starting with a statistic about how many small gyms crumble due to failure to keep up with large franchises. After giving that stat, explain how you are there to help ensure that won't be them. Just an idea, great pitch so far though!
Michelle
Lucas,
ReplyDeleteYour elevator pitch was delivered very confidently and in an organized manner. What seemed to stand out to me was the way you described exactly how you could advertise and promote the gyms you would be helping. The idea of promoting through social media is not only a great idea, but also something I believe many gym owners aren't quite comfortable with. Being at the age you are many gym owners would likely trust you to promote their gyms in the most appealing and accessible manner possible.
Roberto
Lucas,
ReplyDeleteGreat flowing elevator pitch. It appears you have a background in sales and you sold your service well. The ability to sale your company well, show the potential customer that you can sale their gym just as well. The only suggestion or feedback I would be able to give would be how many times you say “right”. It was a little distracting, but that was all I could find wrong. The message, tone, pace and inflection were on point.
Tony Elam